‘This fortress is infallible,’ the General thought. ‘And it’s finally mine.’
Made of steel-reinforced concrete, standing on a block of more concrete and surrounded by a moat of deep water, there seemed nothing that could penetrate its walls. The few windows of triple-glazed, bullet-proof glass shone in agreement.
Stocks of food were kept in case of siege. Water was pumped from the fortress’ own well in the kitchens. The general was led to his new bedroom at the top, the largest room with the largest window that looked over the valley below.
That night, an old, portly officer who had served the previous General for many years, died under mysterious circumstances. The new General allowed only a small funeral, and the tradition was to float the body of the officer in a small wooden boat, out from the fortress, through the village clustered around where the families lived, down the valley and into the river below, with all of their worldly belongings.
The General, however, was jealous of the dead man’s medals and decided to keep all of his belongings. The officer’s family, who were poor but well-loved before this new General came to power, were suddenly bereft of their honour. Sadly but patiently, they laid the rest of their belongings alongside the officer in his makeshift boat and carried it up to the fortress.
The officer was sent on his journey to the river. However, the chute down to the river had dried up years ago, so a great deal of water had to be pumped down the chute to move the body along.
The General and the other officers bowed their heads and left as a mark of respect. The dead man, plump from years of good service and better meals, scraped against the gravel and grass growing on the bottom of the chute, and the boat became wedged in a narrow tunnel leading to the outside of the fortress, unable to move.
The water was building up behind him but the pump kept pumping, pumping, pumping, and soon the basement kitchen started to flood. Up and up the water level rose, past the stairs, up over the ground floor doors (well sealed to keep out any radiation or debris), up and up, through all the floors…
Outside, the fortress was beginning to feel the strain of all that water. The concrete was stronger than the glass, however, so it was the glass that shattered first, water pouring out of the holes like a waterfall of tears, carrying out the drowned bodies of the officers.
Last of all was the General, still stubbornly clutching the medals he had coveted, and he drifted down the chute to join the other dead men. They were trained for fights, but not for floods.
Based on a dream I had when I was 13
This is a really good story!!
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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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I loved this! I definitely didn’t see the ending coming 🙂 Your writing style is very fluent and easily read 🙂 x
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Haha thank you! As dreams go, it was one of the more sensible ones…
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Very vivid storytelling! Dreams are the best for inspiring tales. I had a dream a few days ago which have inspired me to write it up. Hope to share it sometime! Keep on writing!
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Thank you! It is one of my first fiction pieces on here so your comment means a lot 🙂 looking forward to reading about your dream!
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👏👏👏Excellent Jess you should keep writing
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Thank you very much 🙂 wishing you the best!
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Hopefully reading more of your work as the years continue
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Thank you, I appreciate your support 🙂
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Likewise. Watching the first season of Alphas. Actually not bad. Blessings for this full moon x
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This style of post definitely suits you, an enjoyable read which didn’t get boring : )
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Thank you, it’s definitely a more sullen and numb vibe. I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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I didn’t mean it like that 😂 though your blog is far too uplifting and cheerful for my tase 😉
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Ahaha well you’ve been treated to a nice morbid post for a change 😛
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This is amazing !!!
Well done 💜
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Thank you, so glad you liked it 😀
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Really enjoyed this story! I didn’t see that ending coming and bet the general didn’t see that coming either haha
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Ahaha thanks! He definitely did not, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂 I don’t usually write stories so your feedback really made my day!
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Aw well I hope you keep writing stories! 😊
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You too 🙂
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I didn’t see the end coming but this is cute! Made me smile to think of the General getting his comeuppance with his nemesis clogging the plumbing 😉
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Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it 😀 yes I don’t know how my subconscious came up with that one but it certainly worked out fine aha
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